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7 9 13                       he took a bow overlooking interstate 680:

                                           car-comets in full spin,
                                                          orbital lights

                                                  his dreams planetary, saturnian -

                                          he almost sprouted wings that night and
                                   i cannot say it would not be beautiful;

                             the palpations of downtown pumping
                             luminous cells, coursing
                                       through highway veins
                       
                    and he, standing in the heart of his world
             visions galactic
                             mind ecstatic -

                                                                his feet began

                                                                to lift just a little.


9 20 13

a few phone calls
and a pair of lost glasses later
i am glad
that he is still terrestrial.
please don't leave me in this human dimension
9/21/13

Update 11/15/13: Wow, my first DD! :o Thank you so, SO much to `NicBelroque for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for the feature! I'm more than honored!

Unfortunately though, I was not expecting this much traffic on such a personal poem about my friend. Therefore I am renaming this poem (and the other two inspired by him) and taking his name out of the titles for the sake of his privacy. I apologize to my readers because I feel like there is less power and intimacy without his name, for his name truly holds a lot of meaning to me and captures his identity as a person.
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Given 2013-11-15
khanh, ii by ~Spellspeaker Suggester Writes: The formatting in the piece has been put to work and it pays off beautifully and accurately complements the content. ( Suggested by Nichrysalis and Featured by BeccaJS )
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my end-of-the-year journal feature :) (Smile)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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jmdemers Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are a cosmic wordsmith. Thanks for the emotion.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:!!! I am so honored. Thank you so much for you kind words. :)
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jmdemers Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just had to come read this again. This poem has such amazing imagery. Thanks again.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. This is so gorgeous. And while I do agree that a name would have made it feel more personal, I think that having it this way makes it more relateable to others. :heart: Congrats on the DD! You deserve it.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you so much!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome ;D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: :hug:
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Mister-Saturn Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is absolutely gorgeous.
I don't even know what it is but it's absolutely beautiful.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you anyhow. I'm glad you enjoy it :heart:
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Mister-Saturn Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
XD
I probably just need to sit and examine it a bit farther

But yes you're welcome
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Deathbypuddle Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This is interesting indeed! :O Congrats on your Daily Deviation, bet it was a surprise :dummy: 
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was a big surprise! Thank you :heart:
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Deathbypuddle Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
you're welcome! :heart:
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gummyrabbit Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
"i am glad
that he is still terrestrial"

Dear Jesus, this is beautiful.  I think an experience I had with my best friend was similar, and this poem means a lot to me.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad it speaks to you. Thank you so much. :heart:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
Yknow, when I read this I thought to myself "this really is DD quality". 

Glad the CV's thought so too xP
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha! Well I'm glad that that was your impression. :P
Thank you so much! It's a tremendous honor.
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PAL1234567891 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I think you could just change the name into something else. It would be alright. :)
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^.^
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Char-Li Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The weight of realizing what is happening is incredible.
I love the way this is written, taking something so horrible and making it tragically beautiful. Like a solemn violin piece~
Congrats on the DD! You deserve it!
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. <3
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013   General Artist
!

This is so well crafted...congratulations on a well deserved reward.  :)
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :glomp:
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KCsummerz Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! You too. :love:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Student Writer
" car-comets in full spin,"

Such a beautiful way to put something so horrible. Brilliant stuff. 

Congrats on the DLD :3
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you kindly :heart:

there is a curious beauty in destruction, a favorite subject matter of mine
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2013  Student Writer
Definitely. Probably why a lot of my nature poems often have quite destructive imagery, haha xP

You're welcome :3
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fernknits Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh, I am overwhelmed by this.  I shuddered at "his feet began/to lift just a little."  Congrats on a well-deserved DLD! :)
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you 
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can't get over how much I love this.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: Thank you so much!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013

Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.…  and on our main page.



Keep writing and keep creating.

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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:!!! Wow!! Thank you so much, I am so incredibly honored! :)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my journal :)
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh wow, I am so honored! Thank you so much. :heart:
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
love it.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart::heart:
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
absolutely wonderful. i love the second part. :)
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you for your kind words
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
my pleasure. :)
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toxic-nebulae Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013  Student Writer
the first part soars, whirls, fluoresces--the second crashes and grows roots and grows
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