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7 9 13                       he took a bow overlooking interstate 680:

                                           car-comets in full spin,
                                                          orbital lights

                                                  his dreams planetary, saturnian -

                                          he almost sprouted wings that night and
                                   i cannot say it would not be beautiful;

                             the palpations of downtown pumping
                             luminous cells, coursing
                                       through highway veins
                       
                    and he, standing in the heart of his world
             visions galactic
                             mind ecstatic -

                                                                his feet began

                                                                to lift just a little.


9 20 13

a few phone calls
and a pair of lost glasses later
i am glad
that he is still terrestrial.
please don't leave me in this human dimension
9/21/13

Update 11/15/13: Wow, my first DD! :o Thank you so, SO much to `NicBelroque for suggesting and ^Beccalicious for the feature! I'm more than honored!

Unfortunately though, I was not expecting this much traffic on such a personal poem about my friend. Therefore I am renaming this poem (and the other two inspired by him) and taking his name out of the titles for the sake of his privacy. I apologize to my readers because I feel like there is less power and intimacy without his name, for his name truly holds a lot of meaning to me and captures his identity as a person.
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Given 2013-11-15
khanh, ii by ~Spellspeaker Suggester Writes: The formatting in the piece has been put to work and it pays off beautifully and accurately complements the content. ( Suggested by Nichrysalis and Featured by Beccalicious )
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my end-of-the-year journal feature :) (Smile)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: dailylitdeviations.deviantart.… Congratulations on your DD!

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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jmdemers Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are a cosmic wordsmith. Thanks for the emotion.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:!!! I am so honored. Thank you so much for you kind words. :)
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jmdemers Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I just had to come read this again. This poem has such amazing imagery. Thanks again.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
Wow. This is so gorgeous. And while I do agree that a name would have made it feel more personal, I think that having it this way makes it more relateable to others. :heart: Congrats on the DD! You deserve it.
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Spellspeaker Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: Thank you so much!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Student Writer
You are very welcome ;D
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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